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Tuesday, 22 May 2018

Painting a Picture in the reader's head

WALT: Use our senses in our writing to paint picture in the reader's head.

Here is an example of my writing. Can you imagine the scene in you head?




One sunny day I went fishing in the deep, salty, blue water. I could hear waves splashing under the water.  Suddenly I saw an old and dusty ship. The ship was very rusty and brown. I could see broken pieces of it on the ground. Then I saw a big crack on the middle of the ship. I went inside and I saw a treasure chest. I opened it and it was full of coins and gold. It will be mine all mine , but I thought I could share it with the city. So I carried the treasure chest and swam along to the city, it was very heavy. When I was finally standing on the sand everyone in the city was surprised. My family also got surprised. I started sharing the coins and the gold to the city. While I was sharing the gold, the people from the city thought that my family should rule the city. We were so happy. The sea even talked to me once in my dream. The sea said that I was so kind and helpful that he want me to rule the salty sea water and that is how I ruled the sunken ship city.